What Is Words On A Page

Words On A Page is a blog dedicated to analysing films old and new. We look at the story, the characters, the action, and everything else that defines a film.

We aim to show that the foundation of every film is the script- The "Words On A Page" that give this blog its name. In doing this, we aim to encourage aspiring screenwriters to look at both the strengths and weaknesses of films that they see, and apply the lessons learnt to their own scripts

Friday 27 February 2015

MoviePoet - The Best Short Scripts

You might be getting used to the in-depth film and script reviews posted on this site, but here is something different.

One of my favorite screenwriting sites, MoviePoet, is closing down tomorrow. MoviePoet was a site where amateur and professional screenwriters could submit short scripts for monthly competitions. These scripts were usually up to five pages long, but some of the competitions challenged participants to make shorts, single-page scripts and even feature-length screenplays. 

During the eight years in which the site operated, over 2400 scripts have been submitted on it. Below are five of the best. All of these won the monthly competitions with over 40% of users giving them an "Excellent" rating. Click on the script title to read them.

Christmas Cards by David M. Troop

Les Garcons by JeanPierre Chapoteau

Saved My Bacon by Tim Westland

The Tower of Wishes by Matias Caruso

Wheel by Dan Delgado

All of these scripts are published here with the permission of the authors. 


Monday 16 February 2015

5 Screenwriting Lessons – Little Miss Sunshine



Who Wrote It?

Little Miss Sunshine was written by Michael Arndt.

How Long Is It?

Little Miss Sunshine is 101 minutes long, including credits.

What’s It About?

Little Miss Sunshine follows the Hoovers, a dysfunctional family who live in Albuquerque. They consist of harried mother Sheryl (played by Toni Collette), Richard, her husband, an unsuccessful self-help teacher (played by Greg Kinnear), drug addicted grandpa Edwin (played by Alan Arkin), uncle Frank (played by Steve Carell), a gay scholar recovering from a recent suicide attempt, teenage son Dwayne (played by Paul Dano), who is taking a vow of silence, and daughter Olive (played by Abigail Breslin), a perky seven year-old obsessed with beauty pageants. When Olive gets a last-minute invitation to compete at the Little Miss Sunshine beauty pageant, which will be held in California, the Hoover family have two days to get to the venue in a derelict VW camper van, and their journey proves to be highly eventful.

5 Screenwriting Lessons – Little Miss Sunshine
(The Following May Contain Spoilers)

Journeys Are Vital to Character Growth – The main focus of Little Miss Sunshine is the Hoovers’ realisation that they will have to work together in order to fulfil Olive’s dreams. Out of all the family members, this challenge is hardest for Dwayne. His dislike of his family is expressed clearly and effectively when Frank tries to start a conversation with him at the dinner table. When Frank asks Dwayne if he has any friends, Dwayne writes “I hate everyone” and underlines his comment when Frank mentions the rest of the family. His strained relationship with them is severely tested when he finds out that he’s colorblind and will never be able to fulfil his dream of being a pilot. This causes him to have a breakdown, during which he ends his vow of silence and viciously attacks his family. However, when Olive decides to go and comfort him, Dwayne realises how much she appreciates him, and re-joins the family, allowing them to get to their destination in time. Dwayne’s acceptance of Olive’s dream demonstrates that he has become a more selfless character, as her goals now matter more to him than his failures.

Another member of the family who tries to deal with unattainable dreams is Richard. When he finds out that his agent, Stan Grossman, has failed to land the deal that would get his book published, he steals a motorbike and drives to the hotel where Stan is staying to confront him personally. Once there, Richard responds angrily to Stan’s comments about his inability to sell as an author, and announces that he is dissolving their partnership. During this sequence, Richard’s assertive nature, which has previously been a hindrance in his relationship with others, is given a more positive use, as he states that will not let others define him and the manner in which he pursues his dreams. Dwayne and Richard are both forced to realise that the effort they put into attaining their goals was futile, and a longer-lasting and more reliable source of happiness can be found by supporting their family.

Give Characters Shades of Grey – No matter how colourful and distinctive a character is, they need to be depicted with enough nuance to seem realistic. The characterisation of Edwin provides a good example of a memorable but seemingly one-note character who is portrayed with increasing complexity the longer we get to know him. Initially, Edwin appears to be little more than a vulgar and immature grandparent. In the car, Edwin gives Dwayne a talk in which he provides very inappropriate advice, telling him to start having sex as quickly and often as possible, in a speech full of profane language. However, when he interacts with Olive, we see another side to him, as he assures her that she is “beautiful inside and out”, and tells her not to worry about failing, as the real losers are those that do not try. The contrast between Edwin’s crass and offensive behaviour towards the male members of the Hoover family and his caring treatment of Olive develops his character, as the seeming contradictions between the two sides of his personality demonstrate that he is not a completely stereotypical character. This makes him seem more rounded and interesting to watch.

Olive is another character with an important personality trait that is gradually established throughout the course of the movie. In spite of the enthusiasm with which she pursues her dreams of being a beauty queen, Olive’s insecurity is her defining flaw. When the family have breakfast at a diner, Richard tells her that the ice cream that she has ordered can make her fat, causing her to feel uncomfortable. At the pageant, Olive meets one of her favourite beauty queens, Miss California, who says that she eats ice cream frequently as well. This highlights one of the main problems with beauty pageants, as Olive feels like she has to conform to an established image in order to compete. Miss California’s comments demonstrate that it is unnecessary for Olive to forbid herself from enjoying the things she loves, and this foreshadows the primary message of the climax, that Olive doesn't need to follow the conventions of beauty pageants, and, like the other members of the Hoover family, is happiest being herself.  

Establish Personalities Effectively – The Hoover family are introduced in an opening sequence that establishes their quirks and flaws. Olive is watching a video of an old beauty pageant, Richard is giving a lecture to a near-empty classroom, Edwin is taking heroin in the bathroom, and Sheryl is arguing over the phone, denying the fact that she is smoking in the car. This extract sets up the various obstacles that the family face in their daily life. Whilst it establishes their unusual nature, it also demonstrates that their problems are typical enough for them to seem like realistic and relatable characters.

The emphasis on the Hoovers’ distinct personalities is a pivotal part of the first act, especially when they sit together at the dinner table for the first time. The primary sources of conflict in the scene are Frank’s reluctance to reveal the issues that led to his suicide attempt and Richard’s belief that Frank’s actions render him a failure. Their primary character flaws, namely Frank’s inability to get over his depression and Richard’s refusal to accept the perceived weaknesses of others, are fully displayed in this scene, and the presence of the rest of the family provides an extra level of tension, as they notice these failings as well. This means that both Richard and Frank have to face up to their negative traits in order to gain the respect of those around them. Generally, the first act is focused on setting up the dysfunctions and flaws that define the Hoover family, whilst making them appealing enough for the viewer to want them to overcome these issues.

Hypocrisy is Key to Comedy – Comedy is heavily based on the contrast between an expected outcome and an unexpected one, and this incongruity can often be highlighted through characters who say one thing and do another. The best example of this in Little Miss Sunshine occurs during the climactic beauty pageant. The various girls who participate are dressed in a manner that is highly inappropriate for their age, with several wearing bikinis. When Olive performs the routine that Edwin created for her, it turns out to be a burlesque-style striptease. The pageant organisers are horrified by this, and attempt to remove Olive from the stage. The contrast between their acceptance of the earlier performances and their reaction to Olive’s dancing suggests that they regard the latter as extreme and unusual, but the viewer is made aware of the fact that the difference between Olive and her competitors is not as significant as it seems to the people running the pageant. This narrow gap, and the inability of the pageant judges to notice it, highlights how unreliable their opinions are, and suggests that the sexualisation of child performers is inherently problematic.

Tight Time Frames Increase Tension –The Hoover family have just two days to make the 800-mile journey from Albuquerque to California, and they have to deal with problems that make an already-difficult task seem impossible.  When Richard breaks the clutch, the mechanic he consults claims that replacement parts will not arrive until the following week. The Hoovers soon find a solution to this problem, as they are told that they can get the car moving by pushing it until the engine starts, then jumping into the vehicle. This dangerous strategy establishes that the Hoovers are willing to take any risks to get to California. More importantly, it provides effective symbolism for the changes that they will have to undergo on their journey. In order to achieve their external goal (reaching the beauty pageant) and their internal desire (repairing the rifts between the various family members), the Hoovers will have to work together to keep the VW van – and their relationship – on track.

The problems with the car seem insignificant later on, as the Hoovers face a number of problems that would usually spell the end to a road trip like theirs. At the midway point of the film, Edwin dies of a drug overdose. However, realising how much seeing Olive at the pageant would have meant to him, the family continue on their journey anyway. When they are told that they cannot transport Edwin’s body until funeral arrangements have been made, they steal it from the hospital and hide it in the trunk of their car until they reach their destination. Their readiness to carry out such a risky action highlights how desperate they are to get to the beauty pageant, and establishes that their journey is no longer solely for Olive’s sake – it matters just as much for the rest of the family. This shift in motivation proves that the Hoover family understand each other better, and this would not have happened were it not for the time spent on the journey so far, and the difficulties they have faced together.

Conclusion

Little Miss Sunshine proved to be successful both critically and financially because of its engaging and developed characters and ability at dealing with dark issues, such as suicide, depression and child exploitation, whilst keeping a generally upbeat tone throughout. The Hoovers are relatable characters whose growth during the movie is entirely believable, and the story is both familiar and unusual. The blend of the conventional and the unique allows Little Miss Sunshine to appeal to both viewers who want something that is fun to watch, and those who are interested in more challenging fare. This is the main reason why the film was popular on release and remains well-regarded today.

Tuesday 20 January 2015

5 Screenwriting Lessons – The Player


Who Wrote It?


The Player was written by Michael Tolkin, and based on his novel of the same name.

How Long Is It?


The Player is 124 minutes long, including credits.

What’s It About?


The Player follows Griffin Mill (played by Tim Robbins), an executive at a film studio with the job of approving or rejecting the numerous scripts he sees. When he begins to receive threatening letters, he suspects David Kahane (played by Vincent D’Onofrio), a hot-tempered screenwriter whose idea he had dismissed in the past, of sending them, and goes to Pasadena to confront him. During a heated brawl, Griffin accidently kills David, but as the threats continue, he realises that he was going after the wrong man. This forces Griffin to try and cover up his crime, whilst avoiding being exposed in an investigation conducted by Detective Avery (played by Whoopi Goldberg). He also has to deal with a rival for his job, whilst conducting a romance with David’s widow June Gudmundsdottir (played by Greta Scacchi)


5 Screenwriting Lessons – The Player

(The Following May Contain Spoilers)


Demonstrate Movie Knowledge – The Player relies heavily on “in-jokes”, which can be understood by those with an advanced knowledge of movies. One of these is a reference to the successful erotic thriller Fatal Attraction. Shortly after Griffin kills David, we hear an executive mention the fact that the movie’s ending was changed as a result of audience feedback. The specifics of this change are not mentioned in the scene, but Fatal Attraction’s initial, darker, ending was replaced by a more mainstream climax in which the protagonist kills his unhinged stalker in a fight in the bathroom. This allusion has two purposes. First of all, it reflects the action we have just seen, implying that Griffin’s actions will have far greater repercussions then they do in the movies. It also sets up the changes that the studio will make to their movie Habeas Corpus, demonstrating that they will always put audience approval before creative freedom, therefore establishing a major theme of the movie. As a result, a seemingly innocuous piece of movie trivia that reflects the Hollywood execs’ obsession with movies turns out to be significant for both the characters and the story.

There are also a number of in-jokes which do not pertain directly to the plot, but instead focus on the large number of celebrities who cameoed. Sixty actors, 12 of whom were Oscar winners, made cameos in the movie, and there are a number of allusions to their fame, for example a scene in which Griffin is accosted by Malcom MacDowell, an actor famous for playing threatening characters in violent movies such as A Clockwork Orange. This adds a degree of realism to the movie, as fictional characters are interacting with these celebrities as if they were real people in their world as well, and the dialogue between the characters and celebrities would feel plausible in Hollywood. However, this gimmick also adds to the artifice inherent in the story. Even when an actor is playing a character within the film, their celebrity status is made clear throughout. Detective Avery is introduced holding an Oscar, a reference to Whoopi Goldberg’s win for her role in the movie Ghost, which occurred just a year before The Player was released. The large number of stars making gratuitous appearances reflects the belief that Hollywood movies rely too much on star power, but at the same time, The Player takes this convention to its logical extremes.

Meta-humour Can Be Easy to Understand – Meta-humour is a term used for comedy that is about the telling of jokes, and the use of jokes about filmmaking in The Player is key to its irreverent approach. The opening scene depicts everyday life on the backlot of a typical Hollywood studio. It moves between various execs discussing movies, studio tours, and pitches being conducted in the rooms overlooking the space, with all these elements being shown in a single eight-minute shot. The scene introduces the characters of Griffin and Bonnie, and establishes the former as the protagonist by setting up the threat to his job, and ending with him receiving his first poison pen letter. The unusual nature of this introduction is highlighted by two employees discussing Hollywood’s obsession with constant cuts, and talking about similar single-take openings, such as the beginning of the classic movie Touch of Evil. This sets up the “Postmodern” tone of the movie, in which the reality of Hollywood is deconstructed to reveal that the movie studios are just as artificial as the films they make.  

The ending is another example of meta-humour, as it proves that The Player is set in a world guided by movie conventions instead of more sensible outcomes. In the final scene, Griffin receives one last call from his blackmailer, who presents the story of Griffin’s crime and escape in the form of a pitch, and promises to provide a Hollywood ending for him “if the price is right”. This is followed by Griffin’s return to June, and the closing lines of the film are the same as the closing lines that follow Habeas Corpus’ tacked-on happy ending (“What took you so long?” “Traffic was a Bitch”). This demonstrates that the resolution of the movie is primarily based on the audience’s desire for a completely happy ending. In providing one for Griffin despite his actions, the film aims to make viewers question the ease with which it was attained, and therefore point out how problematic a formulaic Hollywood ending can be when applied to a situation where it’s undeserved.

Increase Suspense – The Player climaxes with a scene in which Griffin is put in a police line-up, and has to avoid being identified as David’s killer by a witness. As the detectives move through each of the suspects in turn, the tension is increased by the inexorable progress of the procedure, as it is already clear that Detective Avery believes that Griffin is guilty of first-degree murder. This puts him at a disadvantage, and leaves the audience wondering how he will manage to escape. Therefore, when the witness identifies the wrong person as the culprit, it is easy for the viewer to feel Griffin’s relief, in spite of the fact he has just gotten away with murder, as the outcome he had expected and feared is avoided in dramatic fashion.

Another tense scene occurs at the end of the first act, and Griffin goes to Dave’s house to try and find him. His call is intercepted by June, and, as he talks to her, he tries to spy on her through the window whilst avoiding detection. Although David is out of the house, the risk of being exposed by June could ruin Griffin’s chances of creating peace with him and ending the increasingly vicious threats that he has been receiving. Furthermore, as Griffin talks to June, he begins to develop feelings for her, and the prospect of this makes reconciliation with David even less likely. Putting a character in jeopardy is a good way of making the audience interested in them, and the threat Griffin faces, whilst mostly his own fault, is serious enough for most viewers to relate to his desire to be free of it.

Focus on Primal Issues – Griffin is a notable example of an antihero who can interest the audience in spite of his unlikeable behaviour. Even before he kills David, he is demanding specific brands of water from a waiter, and complaining when it is served in a wine glass as opposed to a more traditional one. However, when he commits the murder that should make audiences hate him even more, it is a panic-based accident. Because the circumstances in which the crime was committed are easy to understand, the audiences becomes interested in seeing whether or not Griffin can avoid the murder conviction which he now faces.

One example of the emphasis on basic feelings that can be understood by all viewers is the subplot focusing on the making of a legal thriller called Habeas Corpus. The script is depicted as being very pretentious, relying almost entirely on its bleak denouement, and the enthusiasm with which the writers accept the happy ending imposed on it at the end reveals that their focus on making a “serious” movie was little more than a marketing gimmick to attract audience attention. However, for all its melodrama, the basic concept of Habeas Corpus (a prosecutor tries to get an innocent woman executed in a bid to subvert Capital Punishment statistics) is highly dramatic and therefore intriguing. As a result, it feels like a movie that Hollywood could conceivably make (Michael Tolkin was allegedly approached to turn it into a real film), and this increases both the realism of the world in which the Hollywood executives operate, and the accuracy of the satire.

Understand the Realities of the Industry – With its emphasis on the realities of Hollywood, The Player places a significant amount of focus on role of screenwriters in the movie industry. The opening scene features a lot of screenwriters pitching stories with outlandish premises that can be summed up by comparing two existing movies; For example, When Griffin receives his first threat, he is listening to a pitch describing a story as “Ghost meets The Manchurian Candidate”. This simplistic style of pitching grabs the attention, but makes the movies seem highly formulaic, establishing that Griffin and the other executives would rather have a marketable film than an original one.

There are also a number of instances where excerpts from screenplays are read out loud. Bonnie reads a poorly-written, mechanical, sex scene from a popular script to Griffin, whilst the writers of Habeas Corpus begin their pitch with short sharp sentences and vivid descriptions that attract Griffin’s attention, but highlight the ostentatious nature of the project. The Player is primarily focused on storytelling, but the way in which a script is written reflects the approach the writers are taking to their material. Even though the screenwriting industry is portrayed in a rather unflattering light, the observation that storytelling is one of the most important aspects of a movie can be highly valuable to anyone trying to write a strong script.

Summary


The Player is a great example of a satire that can be highly vicious towards its primary target, the people working for the movie industry in Hollywood, but is light-hearted enough to be enjoyed by them as well. It uses creative meta-humour, and manages to be intriguing and suspenseful enough to catch the audience’s attention, in spite of the unlikeable protagonist. However, the most important reason for The Player’s success as a satire is its knowledge of the movie industry and the aggressive manner in which it operates. This provides the film with a level of insight that is just as relevant today as it was upon its release in 1992. As a result of this, The Player is an especially good film to watch if you’re familiar with the movie industry, as any budding screenwriter should be.