5 Screenwriting Lessons – Croupier

Who Wrote It?

Croupier was written by Paul Mayersberg.

How Long is It?

Croupier is 94 minutes long, including credits.

What’s It About?

Croupier follows Jack Manfred (Played by Clive Owen), an aspiring writer seeking to create a successful novel. On the advice of his father, he gets a job as a croupier in a seedy London casino. His experiences provide him with plenty of material, but his relationship with his girlfriend Marion (Played by Gina McKee) comes under strain. Furthermore, Jack gets involved in affairs with two women: the cynical dealer Bella (Played by Kate Hardie), and the mysterious Jani (Played by Alex Kingston), thus violating one of the central rules of the casino – Never talk to the other croupiers or the players.

5 Screenwriting Lessons – Croupier

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Get into the Protagonist’s Head – One of the most important aspects of the film is Jack’s Voice-over, which he provides in the third person, as if he were narrating his own story. This serves two purposes. First of all, it sets up Jack’s obsession with writing, as he is aiming to make his narrative seem as dramatic as possible. This sets up the theme of duplicity, as he is hiding his knowledge and observations from the unsuspecting gamblers at the table. Because of this, the audience is left wondering how many secrets Jack conceals, and how relevant these will be to the story. Furthermore, the use of Voice-over also makes the viewer interested in seeing what happens to him. Jack is an aloof character, and needs to be depicted in an accessible manner in order to be worth following. By allowing him a way to communicate with the audience in a manner that retains his introverted personality, but permits an insight into how he really feels, the script succeeds in doing this.

Jack’s desire to craft an appealing narrative is consistent throughout the story. At a party with Jani and his publisher, he offers to deal the cards in a round of poker, and gives everyone an increasingly impressive hand, with Jani winning. From this, it is possible to sense the fact that he has feelings for her, but also that he is interested in the world of the casino because he the thrill of watching the gamblers blow a fortune far more fascinating than anything his publisher wants him to write. This fascination with victory and defeat is the main motivation for his actions at the party. Although Jack ditches the stifling world of publishing in favour of his job on the casino floor at the end of the movie, he retains his fascination with observing the world around him. The fact that Jack is defined by this very common and interesting trait allows him to be a compelling anti-hero.

Simple Things Can be Very Interesting – In the third act, Jack gets himself implicated in a robbery by Jani. She offers to pay him if he provides a distraction on the casino floor. All he needs to do is call out a cheater at his table, which he had done earlier in the movie. The fact that the entire robbery hinges on something that Jack normally does without hesitation increases suspense because the plan is too perfect; it involves attaining large rewards with very little effort. If such a routine action has such significant consequences, then the audience can expect the possibility that something must go wrong. The inevitability that their suspicions will be proven correct encourages them to keep watching, as they want to know what will happen to prevent the plan from working.

Give Characters Unique Personalities – Croupier contains three distinctive female characters, Marion, Bella and Jani. All of them have their personalities developed in a simple and effective manner. Marion is introduced via Voice-over with classical music playing in the background, Bella is first seen undressing in a mirror behind Jack, and Jani is a particularly alluring customer at the tables, standing out due to her expensive look and her confident behaviour. As a result of these vivid and contrasting quirks, this group of characters manage to seem unique and developed in spite of the film’s short runtime.

Jack’s father is also introduced in a manner that conveys his mischievous personality. Whilst Jack is struggling for inspiration, he receives a call from his father recommending that he gets a job at a casino. Jack Sr.’s fast and energetic tone contrasts sharply with Jack’s slow and deliberate style of speaking. The viewer can sense that they are in some sort of conflict, as the two are very different in spite of their family relationship. This generates a number of interesting questions. How did Jack and his father drift so far apart, and will there will be any developments that provide further insight into them? The desire to see these questions answered entices the audience to continue watching.

The Audience Should Be Allowed to Observe Things with the Characters–Initially, Jack is unwilling to take up his father’s job offer, but over the course of the film, he gains an increasing affinity for the world of the casino. His natural ability to function in the casino environment is set up in his first scene there, in which he demonstrates his skills as a croupier. Instantly, he observes that the casino is not replacing chips as often as it should, and passes a test of his dealing skills with flying colours. This shows that he understands the basics of gambling better than the people in charge, and this advantage generates both inspiration for his story and the increasing addiction to the atmosphere of the casino.

Little details can serve to develop characters, but they can also generate suspense. Jani reveals the robbery to Jack in a lavish party in a country house. When she takes him, she has her arm in a cast, and tells Jack that it is because she owes a debt to some mysterious enemies, providing an effective pretext to get Jack involved. The next time we see Jani, her injury has healed. However, a bad bruise which Jack gained in a brawl with a disgruntled gambler remains. The viewer can figure out that Jani was faking her injuries and cannot be trusted. This sets up the intriguing mystery of what her real motivations are, and the prospect of finding these out drives the climax.

Make Your World Unique – One of the most unique features of Croupier is the fact that it is based in London, as opposed to a more traditional gambling location such as Las Vegas or Atlantic City. This allows it to demonstrate a different approach to the subgenre of gambling-based movies, whilst providing truths about that industry which are equally applicable in all casinos everywhere. The wide variety of London scenery is used throughout the film. Key interactions with Bella and Jani take place in Piccadilly, a particularly affluent area of the city. The juxtaposition of the vast spaces there and the drab, confined casino highlights the artifice inherent in the latter location. It relies on extravagance just as much as the expensive London shops, but the casino and its employees do not have the ability to make this seem natural, and, as a result, the seediness and desperation that the place relies on is emphasised instead of concealed.

There is also substantial focus on the life behind the tables. Given the cold and formal manner in which croupiers are expected to conduct themselves, their behaviour once their shift is over is revealing. Many of the dealers frequent a club ran by one of the customers – a clear violation of the rules established at the start of the film. The casino is required to project an image of efficiency and professionalism, in order to encourage patrons to gamble away as much money as possible, and this forces the employees to hide their true personalities. Jack’s ability at doing this allows him to thrive in the casino environment.

Conclusion

Although often regarded as a Thriller due to its neo-noir style, Croupier is closer to a character-based Drama. In spite of its short runtime, it manages to create a cast of characters who are memorable and engaging in spite of their unsympathetic nature, and its focus on the mundane reality of ordinary casinos is unique, generating a number of fascinating insights. There is also a significant attention to detail, with the most ordinary things being depicted in a manner that can grab the audience’s attention and arouse their curiosity. This means that Croupier is worth a watch, as it proves that even the shortest movies can be complex and elaborate without becoming boring or incoherent.

5 Screenwriting Lessons – Collateral

Who Wrote It?

Collateral was written by Stuart Beattie.

How Long is It?

Collateral is 120 minutes long, including credits.

What’s it About?

Collateral follows Max (played by Jamie Foxx), a cab driver in Los Angeles who has been working for years looking for a way to start his own business. His next guest is a mysterious man called Vincent (Played by Tom Cruise), who offers Max $600 to transport him to various LA locations over the course of a single night. Max accepts the offer, but finds out that Vincent is really a hitman contracted to murder five targets during the journey. Forced to continue anyway, Max struggles to find a way to escape as the night progresses.

5 Screenwriting Lessons – Collateral

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The Stakes Should Steadily Escalate – As Vincent carries out his five hits, Max is forced to become increasingly involved in his crimes as he tries to prevent them. However, at the start of the story, he is completely passive. The first hit happens in an abrupt and terrifying manner, as the corpse of the victim drops onto the taxi from a nearby window. Max panics when he sees this, shouting and swearing repeatedly, but when Vincent reveals that he was responsible, he does so with a nonchalant “Good guess”, that shows that his actions have not had any effect on him at all, proving that they are almost routine. This establishes Max’s status as a victim, as Vincent’s calm demeanour and his willingness to threaten others and commit violence to achieve his goals place him in complete control of the situation.  The only way that Max can escape from Vincent is if he manages to regain control, and this dynamic allows for increasing tension as the night progresses and his enemy gets closer to his goal.

Switches In Mood Are Important – Sometimes, an elaborate set-up can be used to increase suspense. A notable example of this is in the scene where Vincent carries out his third hit. Stopping at a Jazz bar, he invites the owner to join him and Max at the table and talk about why that genre of music means so much to him. However, when Vincent reveals why he is at the establishment, the scene turns dark abruptly, and the owner is forced to correctly answer a question about the iconic jazz musician Miles Davis, to save his own life. Hearing the owner discuss his backstory makes him into a more sympathetic character, and therefore the viewer wants to see him survive. The fact that Vincent kills him anyway him even more menacing, and highlights the fact that Max lacks the ability to face up to him properly.

Another tense sequence depicts Vincent entering a club to carry out his fourth hit, as a group of cops investigating the case try to execute a stakeout. The sequence is set to loud and up-tempo music and flashing lights. As Vincent tries to get through the crowd to his target and a disorientated Max attempts to escape, the noisy and energetic atmosphere becomes a major distraction. The contrast with the quiet and lonely nature of the majority of settings in the movie, such as Max’s cab, ensures that the club stands out, and its busy nature makes it harder for the characters to fulfil their objectives.

Both Heroes and Villains should be Complex – After he carries out his third hit, Vincent forces Max to stick to his night-time routine by visiting his mother Ida in hospital. However, in the hospital, he behaves with unexpected friendliness and warmth, persuading Max to buy flowers, and striking up a conversation with Ida. The sequence serves two purposes. First of all, it highlights Max’s central flaw, as Ida tells Vincent that “You’d have to hold a gun to his head to make him do anything”. It also makes Vincent seem more human, as he reacts to Ida’s questions with a polite awkwardness that appears genuine, even though he is faking his affection. This makes him even more unnerving, as it ensures it is hard to tell whether or not his statements can be trusted, making him even more difficult to understand.

Meanwhile, Max is defined by his major flaw – an inability to act. Whilst this is common to thriller protagonists, who are expected to start out as passive characters, Max has been spending twelve years waiting for an opportunity to seize his dream. After Vincent kills a policeman who had believed his innocence, Max calls him out on his sociopathic nature. Vincent responds by attacking Max’s cowardice, claiming that his big plans are never going to come to fruition, because he lacks the conviction to make them happen. This turns into an important scene in Max’s character growth, as he defies Vincent, deliberately crashing the cab to ensure that he cannot get to his fifth and final victim. The fact that Max initially lacks commitment means that when he chooses to act, his heroism has a far greater impact then it would if he was active from the beginning.

Make the Extra Characters Significant – The set-up of the movie depicts Max’s interaction with Annie, a friendly lawyer, as she takes his cab to reach her office. In addition to foreshadowing the climax of the movie, where Max has to take action to protect her from Vincent, it allows him to develop as a character and gain our interest. We find out about his dreams of starting a limousine company, and his kindly nature is highlighted when he allows Annie to keep his favourite photograph. Annie is also a well-rounded individual, as she listens sympathetically to Max, and tells him about the various problems she faces when working on her cases. This ensures that the audience wants the two to start a relationship, creating a reason for them to continue watching in the hope that they escape and get their happy ending.

Another character who manages to be memorable in spite of a lack of screen time is Felix, the mobster who has hired Vincent to carry out his various assassinations. Max meets him when he is forced by Vincent to assume his identity and find the information on the last two victims. Felix provides this exposition in the form of a monologue in which he compares himself to Santa Claus and Vincent to Black Peter, a figure who punishes naughty children.  This analogy is both childish and threatening, but manages to convey the key points effectively – Vincent’s targets represent a threat to Felix, and he is being hired to “punish” them. With his offbeat yet menacing personality and a brief mention of his family that serves to humanise him, Felix stands out as a unique and interesting character, and his delivery of the key information is highly intriguing. As a result, the information that Max and the audience need to know stands out, because it is being given in a manner that makes it worth hearing.

Make the Action Sequences Exciting – Because it focuses on characters and atmosphere in a bid to generate suspense, Collateral uses action sequences sparingly. However, when they do occur, they are intense in nature. Most of the violent scenes in the movie are due to the actions of Vincent, who casually carries out his various kills with a high level of brutality. Just after performing his second hit, Vincent returns to find that a pair of muggers have stolen his briefcase from Max. He follows them and shoots them both. Once he has retrieved the item, he notices one of the men writing in pain, and shoots again to finish him off. As well as setting up how important the briefcase is to Vincent, it shows that he reacts to setbacks with a cold efficiency, as the severity of his retaliation is unnecessary, even given the obnoxious nature of the victims and the potential repercussions of their theft. In a very brief and one-sided burst of action, the extent of the threat which Vincent poses to Max is made disturbingly clear.

After the slow-building tension of the first two acts, Collateral climaxes with an elaborate chase sequence, as Max tries to rescue Annie from Vincent. As Vincent cuts the electricity at Annie’s office, the darkness increases the tension of the scene, as it makes it harder for Annie to get out, and places her at a disadvantage. Meanwhile, Vincent uses mirrors to track his target, and this allows him to move without her knowing where he is and what he is doing. Vincent’s increased freedom in this confined space forces Max to react quickly if he wants to save Annie. In chase scenes, the villain should usually have an ability that makes it harder for the heroes to defeat them, and Vincent’s experience and composure make him a formidable opponent.

Conclusion

Collateral is a textbook example of how to make an efficient and engrossing thriller. It uses the classic formula of an initially uncommitted protagonist threatened by a unique and unyielding enemy and forced to take action. However, it does so in an original manner, with its focus on a well-developed lead character and an implacable but fascinating foe. The supporting cast is memorable, and the scenes are directed well, allowing for the escalation in tension that is integral to the story. Overall, it proves that the simplest thriller concepts can be the most impressive if they are well written and contain great characters.